Thursday, September 21, 2017

Golden Boot

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Jamal lies on his bed his eyes dart towards the door willing it to open.  The room is sparse, stripped of the valuables over the years but the TV still remains.  Kabul hosts a soccer match tonight and his eyes light up at the thought.

Jamal loved soccer.  Every holiday he would sneak out in the morning to the dust bowl near his home and play.  Until the day they played on another ground and he stepped on the green butterfly.

Today Abba will take him to get a Jaipur leg fitted. The doctors say soccer is a possibility.

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Written for Friday Fictioneers Word Count : 100.

Afghanistan is one of the most mined countries in the world with estimates of up to 640,000 land mines laid since 1979. More than three decades of conflict have also left the country littered with unexploded ordnance (UXO). As a result, over 23,500 casualties were recorded between 1979 and 2015.

The title of the story Golden boot is a soccer reference of the award given to the top goal scorer.

I wrote this story on the way from from Brisbane to Sydney. Actually finished midway on the Pacific Highway while passing Kempsey.  And not while driving for those who want to know.  A father and his daughter are on this road trip and I trust my driver enough to take my eyes of the road (and speedometer) to write my blog.

Note: Edited to making the setting of the story more obvious.



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22 comments :

  1. Anonymous11:57 pm

    I didn't realise this was set in Afghanistan until I read your note. That makes all the differene

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    1. I made a change to make that connection. Thanks for your comments Neil.

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  2. Land mines are a terrible blight many years after wars have ended. Such a shame, but I liked that you ended with a sense of hope for him. Good story and enjoy the road trip!

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    1. Thanks for commenting Iain. The mines are a blight indeed. The Jaipur Foot is a low cost method of giving the victims some improvement in the quality of life.

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  3. Dear Subroto,

    Educational and elegantly touching story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you Rochelle I am glad you liked it.

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  4. Very nicely painted a vivid image in so few words Subroto.

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    1. Thanks for reading and commenting Dahlia.

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  5. I agree, this is a touching personal tragedy but it's good to see how life will go on for him. Some people would refuse to go anywhere for fear of stepping on another mine.

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    1. The country is heavily mined, they have no other option except to go on with their lives. Thanks for your comments Christine.

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  6. Anonymous11:14 pm

    Great story. Besides, this is a touching tribute to Dr P K Sethi inventor of the Jaipur foot. Brilliant write.

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    1. Thanks YS. Dr Sethi was the co-inventor along with the Master craftsman Pandit Ram Chandra Sharma, who probably did not get the recognition he deserved.

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  7. Great hope in the end, and thinking what can happen still... it seems to me that Afghanistan has been cursed with war for too many years.

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    1. It has been too long. Thanks for your comments Björn.

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  8. This is a very sad story that ends on a hopeful note because of the chance of a prosthetic leg. Landmines are such horrendous things, and I hate the thought of children picking them up because some of them are made to look like butterflies. I'm so pleased that Prince Harry (in the UK) has decided to continue his mother, Princess Diana's work to help landmine victims http://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/2017/04/04/prince-harry-follows-princess-dianas-footsteps-calls-landmine/

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    1. Mines have caused too many casualties and continue doing so even after the conflict ends. Thanks for reading and commenting Sarah.

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  9. Well written, your story-on-the-move!

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    1. Thanks Liz I am glad you liked it.

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  10. An uplifting end to the story.

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    1. Thanks Sandra, I guess it is important to have hope.

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  11. A daily reality there. Horror never really stops. Well told.

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    1. Thanks Linda I am glad you liked the story.

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