Wednesday, May 27, 2015

Sting in the Tale

PHOTO PROMPT © Douglas M. MacIlroy
“Grandpa what is that?”

“That my boy was a dangerous predator I encountered when I was a Storm Trooper.”

“Were you in the Star Wars? Is that even real?”

“Of course it is child you can’t make those things up.”

“It looks ugly”

“It’s vicious and powerful with a poisonous tail. The poison doesn’t kill you but stops you from running away while it eats you.”

“How did you kill it?”

“It was about to eat Grandma so I was able creep up and stab it with my lightsabre”

“You saved Grandma?”


“Sadly I did dear child, sadly I did.”

Written for the Friday Fictioneers  Word Count : 100.  
To read what the other Storm Troopers are upto go here.  

A “Dialogue-only” story this week, something I normally avoid but hopefully it works this time.

28 comments :

  1. I'm guessing grandma is not anywhere nearby to hear that story. Funny story..told well.

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    1. You never know they have eyes everywhere. Thanks for your comments Ansumani, I am glad you liked it.

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  2. Ha..I guess the truth caught up with grandpa in the end of his story.

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    1. Grandpa's been caught long before :-) Thanks for reading and commenting Björn

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  3. Poor Grandma. I'm sure he doesn't mean it. Cute dialogue - it works well.

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    1. True but what about poor Grandpa? Thanks for your comments Margaret, I am glad you liked it.

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  4. Dear Subroto,

    Your dialogue only story says it all. I can almost see the twinkle in Grandpa's eyes and the wide-eyed wonder in the child's. The last line made me laugh out loud.

    Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle I am glad that worked and made you laugh.

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  5. I love the dialogue--and the grandpa. These grandpas always have the best stories. Wonderful.

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    1. Thank you GaH, so glad you liked it.

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  6. It would probably have choked on her anyway!
    Rosey Pinkerton's blog

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    1. Ha! Ha! Grandpa clearly lacked the gift of hindsight. Thanks for your comments Rosey.

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  7. Grandpa certainly knows how to spin a tale. I love the last line about Grandma! Ha ha. This totally works as a dialogue only.

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    1. Grandpa is sticking to what Yoda said "truly wonderful the mind of a child is".
      Thanks for your comments Amy, I am glad you liked it.

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  8. Should have cut out the middle-man and just gone for her with the lightsabre. Poor predator!

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    1. Should have and then just termed it collateral damage as they do it these days. Thanks for reading and commenting Dave.

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  9. Poor grandma, but even poorer grandpa. Dialogue is very well done indeed!

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    1. Thanks for those words of appreciation Perry.

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  10. Poor grandma, but even poorer grandpa. Dialogue is very well done indeed!

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    1. And you can say it again ;-)

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  11. Grandma sure would've been pissed at Luke Skywalker there.

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    1. Possibly more at Yoda :-) Thanks for reading and commenting Brendan.

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  12. Great dialogue. I guess the force was with Grandma.

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    1. Live strong and prosper :-) Thanks for reading and commenting Rae.

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  13. Yes - this dialogue story worked very well - the ending is a 'gotcha'.

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    1. Thank you Bobi Jo I am glad you liked it.

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  14. The dialogue worked well, Subroto. Grandpa tells interesting stories. Grandma's probably used to his teasing by now. Well done. :) --- Suzanne

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    1. Grandpa has been living strong and prospering :-) Thanks for reading and commenting Suzanne.

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