Thursday, July 03, 2014

The Kingdom's End

Copyright – Claire Fuller

My father was a king who ruled with an iron fist.  Set up on a pedestal by his doting queen who remained blind to his transgressions.  We were his underlings catering to his every whim. 

My sisters fled first, from this kingdom of fear, breaking the shackles that enslaved their minds.  Only I remained to serve till I too broke free.

Yet I would return after the decay had set in.  Still on a pedestal but the passage of time had not been kind. His past exposed and the image tarnished.  The edifice was crumbling and restoration now beyond hope.

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Written for Friday Fictioneers. Word Count : 100

An old king lost his crown and a lot more this week.  I thought the tarnished statue an appropriate starting point for this week's post.

14 comments :

  1. Dear Subroto,

    A good use of metaphor. Looks like Mommy was the enabler in the family.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. That is true and enablers cause more harm than good. Thanks for your comments as always Rochelle.

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  2. Yet I would return after the decay had set in. Love this line. Well done. Alicia Jamtaas

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    1. Thanks Alicia, glad you liked it.

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  3. sounds a lot like my family. powerful piece. :)

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    1. And look how well you write scary fiction now :-)
      Thanks for reading, glad you liked it.

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  4. Subroto, Good and well-written story. Probably a number of kings did more harm than good. I would guess that after the statue is gone it won't take long for people to forget his rule. Who would want to remember. Well done. : ) ---Susan

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    1. Thanks Susan, glad you liked it.

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  5. It sounds like the Queen was pulling his strings. Sad that power was more important to him than family. Well written story.

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    1. Thanks for reading and commenting Russell. Glad you liked it.

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  6. Anonymous9:34 PM

    Dear Subroto, Once again, a great story from you and I think the Queen should of put a stop to his tormenting. Well, some women will let men walk all over them. Thanks! Nan :)

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    1. Thank you for your words of appreciation Nan.

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  7. This is very strong - what's not said but plain to see making this a very good and sad piece.

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    1. Thank you Sarah Ann that was what I was aiming for. I am glad it worked.

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