Wednesday, July 30, 2014

Motherland

PHOTO PROMPT- Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields


I see the ground slipping away as we ascend. Terra Firma the solid earth; firm ground, far below.

The land that shaped me, the one that tugs the heartstrings, Motherland. I see rivers, towns, and the vastness of its uninhabited stretches. I feel it within myself through the blood coursing through my veins, whispering, “we made you”.

Leaving behind a part of me, and the family ties that bind. Soon I will be soaring through the sky, the land a distant memory away. Till my destination draws near and I see the land that defines me now welcoming me home.

Written for Friday Fictioneers. Word Count : 100

Initially I was going to be lazy and use an extract from this The Blue Sky but then decided to do some work instead.

24 comments :

  1. Fine narrative, Sub. I like the stream of thought and am glad you weren't lazy this week.

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    1. Thanks Kent, I think so too now :-)

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  2. To have to pull up your roots and find new soil to call your home. A real treat to read.

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    1. Thanks Björn for those words of appreciation.

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  3. quite narrative approach.. keep sharing more and more awesome stuffs...

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    1. Thanks Rahul, glad you liked it.

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  4. Coldplay yes but honestly while reading this David Bowie was singing in the background of my head.
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D67kmFzSh_o

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    1. Ha! Ha! Thanks Dawn. Actually as good as David Bowie is, I think the Canadian astronaut Chris Hadfield did a great cover version in outer space
      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=apemYk2oz7M

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  5. Dear Subroto,

    Exchanging one home for another. Change is difficult. Hopefully this will be a good one for him.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle, I guess it is about taking a closer look into what "home" actually means.

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  6. Subroto, Well written with great description. I also enjoyed the music. : ) ---Susan

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    1. Thank you Susan, glad you liked it.

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  7. Very interesting profile of the land that shapes us and how it may change over time to create a new reality. Well done!

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    1. Thanks for your comments Perry.

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  8. This spoke to me, Subroto! Beautiful sentiments, tenderly expressed.

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    1. Thanks for your comments Vijaya. I am glad you liked it.

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  9. Dear Subroto, Love your story and it is quite telling. I like how picking up your tent and moving somewhere, when you go to sleep the next time - you are still at home. Good job! Nan :)

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    1. Thank you Nan that's, true our home is whatever place we long to be.

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  10. That was a wonderful read...I could relate to the character and the emotions were described beautifully.

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    1. Thank you Preeti for reading and commenting. I am please that it resonated with you.

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  11. This is clearly a hard parting, but the ending, knowing he will be welcomed in his new home is heartening. I liked the way you played with terra firma - injecting the narrator with a touch of fear.

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    1. Thanks for your comments Sarah I am glad you liked it. The narrator was reflecting about how our identities are defined by so many influences in our lives.

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  12. We do develop ties to where we've lived, but sometimes we outgrow them and need to move on. It seems we can thrive where ever we end up :)

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    1. That is true but we are also the product of the sum total of our experiences. Thanks for reading and commenting Janna.

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