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| Copyright- Jean L. Hays |
“That room’s got a magic view,” he rushed
into the room in breathless excitement.
“Come”, he grabbed my hand and guided me to
the door that opened to the garden. A
stained glass decorative item hung from the top.
He described the magical world that lay
across the ‘port-all’. It had a
magic dolphin that swam alongside you as your guide in the shimmering blue
light.
“You see that purple? That’s the tail of the invisible deer.”
A pause.
“We should buy this house and stay here
forever”.
We did but he left us while the magic was young.
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Witten for Friday Fictioneers. Word Count : 99
This week's prompt seems to be inspiring some very sad stories. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sandra
Deletethe only thing better than a dolphin is a magic dolphin.. it started off as happy then that last line made me frown. well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kz.
DeleteAww... Thats sad...
ReplyDeleteYet we could feel the initial magic and smiles!!!
Thank you.
DeleteThis story is full of emotion, most of it understated and therefore more powerful. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Karen. Glad you liked it.
DeleteI am not a fan of capsule stories. Yet, you have been belting out marvellous little symphonies. Carry on, my friend!
ReplyDeleteThanks Umashankar, I am starting to enjoy this genre.
DeleteI find this story - on its surface - light and humorous- a way of dealing with - the underneath reality - betrayal and loss.(Pinter-like). Imaginative in its Harry Potter-ish use of the prompt as a Portall = Portkey and the Invisible deer = Harry's Patronus. Pinter, Potter, Portall, Portkey, Patronus. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Ann, that's very generous praise indeed.
DeleteDear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteI have the impression that the magic is a child. You may tell me if I'm warm or not. Well told.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle and yes your impression is correct.
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