Thursday, December 19, 2013

The 'Port-All'

Copyright- Jean L. Hays

“That room’s got a magic view,” he rushed into the room in breathless excitement.

“Come”, he grabbed my hand and guided me to the door that opened to the garden.  A stained glass decorative item hung from the top.

He described the magical world that lay across the ‘port-all’.  It had a magic dolphin that swam alongside you as your guide in the shimmering blue light.

“You see that purple?  That’s the tail of the invisible deer.”

A pause.

“We should buy this house and stay here forever”.


We did but he left us while the magic was young.


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Witten for Friday Fictioneers. Word Count : 99

14 comments :

  1. This week's prompt seems to be inspiring some very sad stories. Nicely done.

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  2. the only thing better than a dolphin is a magic dolphin.. it started off as happy then that last line made me frown. well done.

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  3. Aww... Thats sad...
    Yet we could feel the initial magic and smiles!!!

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  4. This story is full of emotion, most of it understated and therefore more powerful. Well done.

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    1. Thank you Karen. Glad you liked it.

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  5. I am not a fan of capsule stories. Yet, you have been belting out marvellous little symphonies. Carry on, my friend!

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    1. Thanks Umashankar, I am starting to enjoy this genre.

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  6. I find this story - on its surface - light and humorous- a way of dealing with - the underneath reality - betrayal and loss.(Pinter-like). Imaginative in its Harry Potter-ish use of the prompt as a Portall = Portkey and the Invisible deer = Harry's Patronus. Pinter, Potter, Portall, Portkey, Patronus. :)

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    1. Thank you Ann, that's very generous praise indeed.

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  7. Dear Subroto,

    I have the impression that the magic is a child. You may tell me if I'm warm or not. Well told.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you Rochelle and yes your impression is correct.

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