Friday, December 13, 2013

The Victory Dance



He stood on the wooden platform and gazed at the mural.  It was the last one that he had painted.  In vibrant colours it depicted the village chief, sitting under the shade of the trees, deep in consultation with the village council.  They had forged an agreement with the company for sustainable logging that brought them electricity, access to doctors, revenues from the logging, scholarships for their children and new roads.  It was a victory for his people.  Drunk with happiness he did a little jig on the bench.

“Look mummy” the children shouted, “the boots are dancing by themselves”.
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Written for Friday Fictioneers.  Word Count: 100

18 comments :

  1. Great story. I loved that last line -so unexpected.

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  2. How intriguing!A happy ghost:-)Nice little story here:)

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    1. Thank you. I'll call this phantom 'Dancer' instead of 'Walker' the Ghost who walks :-)

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  3. A cute little gem that invokes a series of images. That was very well written, Subroto!

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    1. Thanks Umashanker that means a lot coming from you.

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  4. that last line caught me off guard, a very lovely surprise :) interesting tale

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  5. Oh that was a great ending.. really a very sweet story to.

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  6. Dear Subroto,

    Now there's a ghost with spirit! Nice one with a surprising twist at the end.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle, the story worked out because I could see him standing there. :-)

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  7. That for me is a real comment on what happens when civilisations clash; one always disappears. Sad but that's the way we allow it to be.

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    1. That's so true Patrick, thanks for reading.

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    1. Thanks for reading Dawn.

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  9. Yup, I agree that you did a great job with that twist, just as the rest of the story was a job well done for those involved.

    janet

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