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You can’t find our village in maps and navigation systems
anymore. No references to it exist
online though we were known in the sixties and seventies for our village fair.
I remember the excitement when the fair came around. The market stalls with delicious food,
crafts, spinning demonstration, book fair, ice creams and lots more.
We walked in a happy stupor for months afterwards, so ecstatic
that we never noticed the missing children. Some
parents even argued that they never had a child and would leave the village
feeling offended.
I remained unscathed.
Why did they never take me?
Why did they never take me?
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Written for Friday Fictioneers Word Count : 100.
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Oh I loved this! Why, indeed. So much more to know. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThank you Madison, I am delighted to get a comment from the original founder of Friday Fictioneers.
DeleteYikes, that was very, very creepy! Well done.
ReplyDeleteSusan A Eames at
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Thanks Susan I am glad you liked it.
DeleteSo very creepy. Horror is always more dramatic when it involves what should be a place of fun and laughter.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sandra, you are the Queen of this genre, so thanks for your comments.
DeleteI'm a real sucker for stories about maps and disappearances, so of course I loved this
ReplyDeleteThanks Neil I am glad you liked it.
DeleteCreepy indeed. The makings of a great TV serial this one.
ReplyDeleteThanks Iain. You don't work as a TV producer by any chance, cos if you do... ;-)
DeleteSo often fun and jollity have a darker side. Excellent.
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Indeed they do. Thanks for your comments Keith.
DeleteDear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteThis left me feeling empty, hollow and wanting to know more. Really well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
That is high praise indeed. Thank you for your comments Rochelle, I am so glad that you liked it.
DeleteThis reminded me strongly of John Wyndham's SF stories. Well done, Subroto
ReplyDeleteThat is a very flattering comparison. Thanks for your comments Penny, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteYour description of the village fair reminded me of ours - until I read what happened at yours. Creepy story, and we clearly had similar ideas this week!
ReplyDeleteThanks Liz. Yes clearly we took a similar approach this week and turned a wholesome ride into something creepy ;-)
DeleteVery well done, Subroto... children disappearing, parents no longer knowing they even had children... this society is being assimilated!
ReplyDeleteThere is something dark afoot. Thanks for your comments Dale, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteGreat story... so many great details and I wonder so about the one being left behind.
ReplyDeleteThe one left behind is not aware that it is a blessing. Thanks for reading and commenting Björn.
DeleteThat's a creepy story of a creepy place that doesn't exist and still could exist.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Norma.
Maybe it's not yet been reported ;-) Thanks for reading and commenting Norma.
DeleteWonderful. I love the way the children were taken and the parents were too euphoric to notice or care or even denied they had them. This in itself is a creepy situation but your character showed such humaness that all she was concerned about was what was wrong with her that she was never taken. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Irene. I remembered the lame boy in Pied Piper of Hamlin who was sad at being left behind and used that idea.
DeleteThis is a wonderful take. It reminds me of the common theme 'separated in a mela' of the older hindi movies. On the other hand we have a real problem about the large number of children that go missing.
ReplyDeleteThat's right tho I had forgotten about the 'separated in a meal 25 years back' theme :-)
DeleteThanks for your comments YS.
Okay, here's the answer. They had to leave someone to tell the tale and you were the lucky scribe - Russell
ReplyDeleteGood answer. Would have been nicer to have got a cut of the action too. Thanks for reading and commenting Russell.
DeleteThis is one situation when I feel it was best to be unwanted. This has a great creepy undercurrent - the fair leading to an amnesiac stupor. Scary.
ReplyDeleteYes but the survivor does not agree, the feeling of regret is too strong. Thanks for your comments Sarah, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteNice read
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Thanks Dee.
DeleteHe remembered the other children though. Maybe he had too good a memory to be taken. That's creepy, Subroto. Good writing. ---- Suzanne
ReplyDeleteHe will be seeking an answer to the why for a long time. Thanks for commenting Suzanne.
DeleteExcellent story--so much mystery!
ReplyDeleteThank you Karen I am glad you liked it.
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