Friday, February 24, 2017

Special Snowflake

PHOTO PROMPT © Sarah Potter

Every snowflake is different. Yet they are crafted from the same elements:  ice crystals, water vapour and dust.  Ice crystals in hexagonal formations that morph into different shapes and sizes. 

To my family my brother’s birth meant the arrival of a much-awaited male heir.  Though we were crafted from the same cloth I was just a maid in waiting till the day he arrived.  The snowfall blanketing the earth in its white embrace that day added a magical moment to the family folklore.


Every snowflake is different.  In the end it was the addiction to ice that did him in.



Written for 
Friday Fictioneers Word Count : 100


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28 comments :

  1. Dear Subroto,

    I can't help saying it. That last line sent a chill through me. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. It was the connection between the start and end of the story. Thanks for your comments Rochelle I am glad you liked it.

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  2. the thought behind this and its many layers is beautiful

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    1. Thank you for those lovely comments Neil.

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  3. Convoluted (like a snowflake), and yet there is poetic justice in there.

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    1. Thanks as always Umashankar.

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  4. It is such a sad reality in too many cultures. Girls are just that. Girls. Not "worthy"... I'm sure she didn't wish it on her brother though...

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    1. They had the same roots and yet he was the special one. She did not wish that end but it just happened. Thanks for your comments Dale.

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  5. Wonderfully lucid. Beautifully crafted.

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    1. Thank you YS thats very nice of you to say so.

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  6. your story is as fascinating as the video

    http://obliqview.blogspot.in/2017/02/someone-in-room-prompt-sarah-potter-it.html

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    1. That video is good indeed. Thanks for reading and commenting IB.

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  7. Great last line, a chilling tale.

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    1. Thanks for your appreciation Iain.

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  8. I really liked the way you developed this, from a wide detached view of nature and then zoomed in for that very discomforting close up. And yet the pacing felt so natural, not at all rushed. This is crazy good.

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    1. Thanks Rommy that is indeed what I was trying to do, so glad you liked it.

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  9. Heartbreaking.

    The tone is perfect for the story. We can feel the numbness of the character, as if there has been so much suffering that speaking of it feels nearly unreal... until the terrible reality of the end.

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    1. Thanks Magaly I am glad you liked it.

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  10. A terrible disappointment to all when a life is cut off abruptly--even to the "insignificant" siblings.

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    1. It is indeed. Thanks for reading and commenting Christine.

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  11. Whoops, there goes the special snowflake. You put an incredible amount of information into this story, fabulous.

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    1. And that's what the title meant :-) Thanks for your comments Gabriele I am glad you liked it.

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  12. Just because it fit's the social criteria for what should be an heir doesn't mean a snowflake will be pretty in the end. It's better to choose such things based on personality.

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    1. That is true indeed. Thanks for reading and commenting Alice.

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    1. Thank you Loré I am glad you liked it.

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  14. Love it, despite the chilling end.

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