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Every snowflake is different. Yet they are crafted from the same
elements: ice crystals, water vapour and
dust. Ice crystals in
hexagonal formations that morph into different shapes and sizes.
Every snowflake is different.
In the end it was the addiction to ice that did him in.
Written for Friday Fictioneers Word Count : 100
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Written for Friday Fictioneers Word Count : 100
Wow a Friday Fictioneers post on a Friday, now thats something that doesn't happen all the time.
To get snowed in by other writers this week click here.
Also a thanks in advance to the non-blogspot users who leave a comment. Much appreciated. And to those who don't, come on over to the dark side ;-)
Dear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteI can't help saying it. That last line sent a chill through me. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
It was the connection between the start and end of the story. Thanks for your comments Rochelle I am glad you liked it.
Deletethe thought behind this and its many layers is beautiful
ReplyDeleteThank you for those lovely comments Neil.
DeleteConvoluted (like a snowflake), and yet there is poetic justice in there.
ReplyDeleteThanks as always Umashankar.
DeleteIt is such a sad reality in too many cultures. Girls are just that. Girls. Not "worthy"... I'm sure she didn't wish it on her brother though...
ReplyDeleteThey had the same roots and yet he was the special one. She did not wish that end but it just happened. Thanks for your comments Dale.
DeleteWonderfully lucid. Beautifully crafted.
ReplyDeleteThank you YS thats very nice of you to say so.
Deleteyour story is as fascinating as the video
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That video is good indeed. Thanks for reading and commenting IB.
DeleteGreat last line, a chilling tale.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your appreciation Iain.
DeleteI really liked the way you developed this, from a wide detached view of nature and then zoomed in for that very discomforting close up. And yet the pacing felt so natural, not at all rushed. This is crazy good.
ReplyDeleteThanks Rommy that is indeed what I was trying to do, so glad you liked it.
DeleteHeartbreaking.
ReplyDeleteThe tone is perfect for the story. We can feel the numbness of the character, as if there has been so much suffering that speaking of it feels nearly unreal... until the terrible reality of the end.
Thanks Magaly I am glad you liked it.
DeleteA terrible disappointment to all when a life is cut off abruptly--even to the "insignificant" siblings.
ReplyDeleteIt is indeed. Thanks for reading and commenting Christine.
DeleteWhoops, there goes the special snowflake. You put an incredible amount of information into this story, fabulous.
ReplyDeleteAnd that's what the title meant :-) Thanks for your comments Gabriele I am glad you liked it.
DeleteJust because it fit's the social criteria for what should be an heir doesn't mean a snowflake will be pretty in the end. It's better to choose such things based on personality.
ReplyDeleteThat is true indeed. Thanks for reading and commenting Alice.
DeleteWhat a superb story!
ReplyDeleteThank you Loré I am glad you liked it.
DeleteLove it, despite the chilling end.
ReplyDeleteThanks Björn.
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