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The hollow nasal honking of the swans snapped him out of his reverie. The greedy birds were swimming to the shore in anticipation of a feed. The calm surface of the lake hid its secrets well.
What lies beneath? Still waters run deep and in his seemingly
placid life there were clandestine meetings, masked desires and dark
motivations.
The man next to him was talking, “True
fact Swans mate for life though sometimes ‘divorce’ does occur after nesting
failure.”
A diver broke though the water and
flashed a ‘thumbs up’ sign.
I wondered where you were going with that title - nicely done. The calm, everyday conversation, distracts the reader perfectly from the diver's grisly find below
ReplyDeleteThanks Sarah. I was trying for the effect of placid surface and raging current beneath.
DeleteTook me a second read to work out what was going on, but I like it. Something bad beneath the lake...
ReplyDeleteClaire
Thanks Claire, the lake can hide many secrets, it's up to us to find them.
DeleteVery well written. This is called a perfect example of fictitious story, Am so glad to have this on Internet. Loved this one. Bookmarked your web, waiting for the next one.
ReplyDeleteThanks, I'll let this one through then ;-)
DeleteFantastic interplay between the surface of things and that which lies hidden beneath - lake and characters alike. I love your use of the swans as an opening device, and the small thumbs-up gesture and snappy dialogue to close. Just great.
ReplyDeleteMarg
Thanks Marge for those word of appreciation.
Deleteuh-oh.
ReplyDeleteBusted.
Randy
Does look it it. Coming soon the unravelling. Thanks for your comments Randy.
DeleteDear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteI guess still waters didn't run deep enough. Interesting that we both used "swan divorce" in our stories with totally different outcomes. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle I am glad you liked it. And yes we did use the same swan fact, but you know great minds and all that jazz.
DeleteThat was one kind of surprising... I can only guess that there are alternatives to divorce
ReplyDeleteAnd it looks like his 'alternative' method has been caught out. Thanks for reading and commenting Björn.
DeleteGood job on this. I didn't known where it was going and you gave it a neat twist at the end.
ReplyDeleteThank you Anna, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteDear Subroto, What a great story! Very well written and interesting. Love the still waters reference and the thumbs up at the end. Just magnificent! Nan :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Nan for those words of praise. I am glad you enjoyed it.
DeleteOh, clever story, Subroto. I love the suggestion of the swan fact. The water's didn't hide their secret quite well enough, it seems.
ReplyDeleteThanks Karen I am glad you liked it.
DeleteSubroto, Oh well. There are too many cell phone cameras, etc around these days to get away with much. He might also have been a suspect and was being watched. It would have been far better if he'd divorced her. Well written. :) --- Susan
ReplyDeleteThanks Susan. He will be swanning around in the prison cell now.
DeleteGreat 100 word story. You packed it all in there. Especially loved the closing. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Russell I am glad you liked it.
DeleteGreat story, The big blue mixed with grisly finds. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks LHN, I am glad you liked it.
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