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| PHOTO PROMPT – © Douglas M. MacIlroy |
“Daddy is Grandma a
star in the sky now?”
At night we huddle around telescopes staring at the night
sky.
“Daddy do you think I too
will be a star one day?”
I ran away from the city when the silence drove a wedge between
her mother and me. Homing in on celestial lights I discover stars, nebulas, a
cluster and even cold distant galaxies at the far reaches of the universe.
In memory of my parents whose 53rd anniversary would have been tomorrow.
The Friday Fictioneers stars themselves have been adding to the galaxy of stories.
I've been writing this while listening to some wonderful music which I must share with you.
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In memory of my parents whose 53rd anniversary would have been tomorrow.
The Friday Fictioneers stars themselves have been adding to the galaxy of stories.
I've been writing this while listening to some wonderful music which I must share with you.
ReplyDelete“Daddy do you think I too will be a star one day?”
My favorite line!
Thanks Dawn I am glad you liked it.
DeleteI'm sure it must be easier to lose oneself in the cold and distant galaxies than the cold and distant people near us. Well done story.
ReplyDeleteI think he finds a connection with the stars that is missing in his life. Thanks for reading and commenting Ansumani.
DeleteWonderful - love how you used the vast space as a metaphor for the coldness in relationships.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comments Björn, he seeks a connection in the stars for what he misses in his life.
DeleteEffective metaphor. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sandra, glad you liked it.
DeleteDear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteThe child's voice adds so much to this. You've done a nice job of layering a story between the lines.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks for those words of appreciation Rochelle.
DeleteI could fee a chill and a touch of sadness in this piece. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Russell I am glad it touched you.
DeleteI hope he doesn't forget his little warm-blooded star amont all the galaxies out there. Great story.
ReplyDeleteI think that is the star he seeks. Thanks for reading and commenting.
DeleteSo sad that he seems to be as cold to his daughter as he was to his wife. She asks, but he doesn't answer.
ReplyDeleteMaybe he cannot contact the daughter and seeks her in the stars. Thanks for reading and commenting Alice.
Deletegreat story. everything fits together, every word thought out carefully.
ReplyDeleteThank you Plaridel for those words. I am glad you liked the story.
DeleteSo poignant. I love it.
ReplyDeleteRosey Pinkerton
Thanks Rosy, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteNice use of metaphor. Will the stars be enough to fill his real life? I hope that I'm a star in the sky someday. I think it's a beautiful thought!
ReplyDeleteHe seeks stars to fill a void but that's never enough. Thanks for reading and commenting Amy.
DeleteThis brought tears to my eyes, may we all find our loved ones in our intergalactic travels.
ReplyDeleteThank you Lore I think you got the essence of his search.
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