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The fire blazed, yellow flames crackling as
I stood in front of the funeral pyre lost in my thoughts. Once where there was life was now engulfed by
the blaze.
The ancients had said that when the body is
burned the fire frees the soul. The funeral
hymn of the Vedas invokes Agni,
the lord of the fire, minister of sacrifice, the giver of wealth.
Is there life after
death? Do our deeds liberate us from saṃsāra,
the cycle of death and rebirth?
The cremation was over and they could never
do an autopsy now. The fire does indeed
liberate.
Written for Friday Fictioneers. Word Count : 100
I didn't think I was going to write this time having been knocked out by viral fever for the whole week. But finally the meds do their thing, the fever and the aches subsides and I seem to breathe normally again (after sounding like Darth Vader this whole week). So maybe that's why its a darker theme this week.
But here is some lighter music to make it better.
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Written for Friday Fictioneers. Word Count : 100
I didn't think I was going to write this time having been knocked out by viral fever for the whole week. But finally the meds do their thing, the fever and the aches subsides and I seem to breathe normally again (after sounding like Darth Vader this whole week). So maybe that's why its a darker theme this week.
But here is some lighter music to make it better.
Brings back too many bad memories; the last rites of my creator.
ReplyDeletehttp://uspandey.com/2012/01/25/my-son-must-i-stay/
Thanks for the link Umashankar I am sorry this bought back sad memories for you.
Deletewow the sinister ending totally caught me off guard. glad to hear that you're feeling better. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Kz, its good to surprise the Queen of Darkness like yourself :-)
DeleteAh the sinister touch.. love how it changed from any funeral to covering up a murder.
ReplyDeleteThanks Björn I wanted to do a switch of pov at the end. I am glad that worked.
DeleteBrilliantly told! I was reading it as a spiritual, almost folk story... and wham! Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Dawn I am glad you liked it. I did aim to put is as remembrance of ancient wisdom before revealing the crime.
DeleteThanks Shandra glad you liked it.
ReplyDeleteDear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry to read that you've been ill and am glad you're doing better. As for your story I think it's one of your best. I also saw it as a spiritual folk tale until the end. Nice set up and twist.
shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you for those kind word Rochelle. I have tried a few of these that mix with ancient texts and quite like doing them.
DeleteBrilliant! :)
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Ankush.
http://wheneveridontgetbored.blogspot.in/2014/09/fireflies.html
Thank you Ankush. Will read yours too.
DeleteSubroto, Glad to hear you're feeling better. Good story with a great twist at the end. Beautiful music. : ) ---Susan
ReplyDeleteThanks Susan. I am glad you liked both the story and the music.
DeleteDear Subroto, I FOUND YOU! I've been looking. Good story - really devious as the writer sounds suspicious - anyway, I don't think this was a natural death. - on a happier note - I'm glad you're feeling better! Nan :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comments Nan, I am happy you were able to find my blog and glad you liked the story.
DeleteGood one, Subroto! There's nothing as pure and liberating like the fire.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading and commenting Aathira.
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