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| Copyright -Rochelle Wisoff-Fields |
“They say that old man on the top floor eats
children.”
“Bah! That’s to scare us from going to the
top. I bet we can get inside his house
if we knock.”
“You can go I am staying out here.”
When he didn’t come back I had go and fetch
him. That seemed to be my duty in
life. Waiting for that lift to descend,
opening the rusted doors, gagging in the stench and the whirring sound of the lift
slowly cranking it’s way upwards.
“I am looking for my friend.”
It's like Hansel and Gretal...only with an elevator :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Carrie. Now that's an interesting thought.
DeleteNow that had me yelling at him to take adults up the elevator with him. A seriously scary story, Subroto.
ReplyDeleteThanks Karen. I am glad you liked it.
DeleteNice take on the prompt. Well not nice... but scary.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sandra. Scary from you is a complement I'll gladly take.
DeleteAck!What a horrid old man!Doesn't he know meat is not good for him-specially at his age ?And seconds?A definite "no,no"!Ah,well,if you gotta to eat,you gotta eat,eh?lol!Loved this dark and cannibalistic take on the prompt Subroto-great job :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Atreyee, sometimes it's important to get to the meat of the story.
DeleteSo true ;-)
DeleteDear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteChilling story. My feet would be like wings down the stairs. Forget the elevator. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle as always for providing the opportunity. I am glad you liked it.
DeleteNooo...... definitely horrifying! I can only imagine the old man's cannibalistic grin! liked this a lot ^^
ReplyDeleteThanks kz. I left the old man to the reader's imagination :-)
DeleteI'd be out of there and on to the police or an adult when my friend didn't return and especially after that last remark (if I stuck around that long.) Good job!
ReplyDeletejanet
Maybe he did run away :-) Thanks for reading and commenting Janet.
DeleteNice creepy feel. He was silly to go to get his friend. He should have bolted! lol
ReplyDeleteThanks Judah, glad you liked it.
DeleteWhat a way to go. That old man, eh! Creepy.
ReplyDeleteThey were warned before. Thanks for reading and commenting Patrick
DeleteSometimes, it's a good idea to heed so-called "rumors"
ReplyDeleteNo smoke without fire. Thanks for reading and commenting Bryan.
DeleteGood story and well done. Chances are someone in the past got away or that story of him eating children wouldn't have started. Maybe this child will escape also.
ReplyDeleteMaybe they did :-) Thanks for commenting Patricia
DeleteThat was amazing ! Good one !
ReplyDeleteThank you. Glad you liked it.
DeleteYES! This is WONDERFUL! Just like an old children's fairy tale! Love it, love it, love it! Good suspense leading up to the rescue kid's attempt. Great story! Nan :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Nan.
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