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| PHOTO PROMPT © Douglas M. MacIlroy |
When he turned forty my father left his job
Sold our house in the burbs and moved us
To the house set in vastness of an acreage
There were whispers amongst family and friends
An open season speculating breakdown or misconduct
At his old job forcing him to resign before a sacking
My parent’s lives were dissected and analysed
Martial fidelity probed, dismembered like
A lab rat to study its anatomical structure
Some wondered if he had won a large lottery
That allowed him the freedom to be reckless
He heard all this and said I just love rattling chains.
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Word Count : 100.
Continuing with the A to Z challenge but today I am combining it with the Friday Fictioneers.
Today it is 'O' for 'Open Season'.
My challenge for April is to write poetry. My A to Z entries can be navigated to from this page - A2Z. Please do take some time out to read and comments on the poems.
To read other stories by the Fictioneers this week click here and to read other writers doing the A2Z challenge click here
I'd love read what you think about this post...
Would "dismembered like A deceased animal" read better as "dismembered like a lab rat"? Nice piece
ReplyDeleteHmm a dead rat is a deceased animal anyway. But maybe it might have a better impact. I am going to try your suggestion Neil. Thanks for reading and the suggestion.
DeleteLoved this take on the photo prompt - especially that last line!
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Thank you Susan I am glad you liked it.
DeleteSometimes it's good to just mess with people :-)
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The simple pleasures of life :-)
DeleteThanks for reading and commenting Iain.
I loved it. Made me smile.
ReplyDeleteThank you Linda I am glad you liked it.
DeleteHa.. All that guesswork... hope the father don't have to rattle any real chains in the end.
ReplyDeleteIdle minds will always speculate ;-) The father does not care about any of the opinions. Thanks for your comments Björn.
DeleteWhat a great take on the prompt, Subroto
ReplyDeleteSome people are major chain rattlers.
And they derive a lot of fun from doing just that. Thanks for your comments Dale, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteHa, the rumour mill runeth over :-)
ReplyDeleteNo just runneth, it overfloweth :-) Thanks for commenting Alistair.
DeleteThe nosey, cynical others!
ReplyDeleteWonderfully written, Subroto.
Best wishes,
Moon
Nosy parkers indeed! Thanks for your comments Moon, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteHe sound like an OK kind of guy. :)
ReplyDeleteHe is better than OK :-)
DeleteThanks for commenting Sandra
I liked the father's attitude. Just let people talk all they want...one must simply sit back and watch the fun! :)
ReplyDeleteThat is the attitude one should have :-) Thanks for reading and commenting Shilpa.
DeleteAh, people love to gossip! Nicely told story
ReplyDeleteThanks Lynn I am glad you liked it.
DeleteYou have constructed this story nicely, Subroto. I like the way you find so many things for neighbours and family to gossip about.
ReplyDeleteThank you Penny I am glad you liked it.
DeleteVery authentic. All them gossips always at it. :-)
ReplyDeleteThem gossips never stop :-) Thanks for your comments Lisa.
DeletePeople will always analyse your life whatever you do. Loved the father's attitude to all the speculation over his simple decision.
ReplyDeleteThanks Fatima I am glad you liked it.
DeleteGreat last line summed it up nicely.
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting Liz
DeleteWonderfully lucid.
ReplyDeleteThanks YS
DeleteReally like the voice behind this - the matter of fact reporting of the examination of their lives, and the 'just because' response of dad. I hope the move was a good one for all.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sarah I am glad you liked it. I leave it to the reader to imagine how the move must have been :-)
DeleteProof of that old saying, "The only exercise some people get is running folks down and jumping to conclusions." :)
ReplyDeleteHa! ha! That's a great saying. Thanks for your comments Christine.
DeleteGreat story, and rattling chains with that crowd you describe is a good thing to do.
ReplyDeleteSome people live to rattle the chains :-) Thanks for reading and commenting Gabriele.
DeleteGreat take. I like his devil my care attitude and his disdain for those with nothing better to do than pry into his life and privacy
ReplyDeleteHe does display that attitude. Thanks for reading and commenting Michael.
DeleteDear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteIf a person has the means and the motivation, why not rattle a few chains? Loved your take on the prompt. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Chains are there to rattle :-) Thanks for your comments Rochelle, I am glad you liked it.
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