Thursday, August 20, 2020

Forever Home


PHOTO PROMPT © Ted Strutz

I always wanted to live in a house with a picket fence, one with wrap around verandas and a weatherboard look outside. Last week I was driving when I went past this house with a ‘for sale’ sign.

The moment I saw it I knew I had found my forever home so I went to take a look. I felt it calling, beckoning me. The gate swung open and the front door was unlocked. 

I’ve discovered that there are ten of us here still alive. It’s the susurration of our desperation that you hear as the house reels you in.


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Written for Friday Fictioneers. Word Count : 100


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  1. Neil MacDonald6:12 am

    Let's hope he gets on with the other nine

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    1. Subroto7:07 am

      He has no other option except to get along.

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  2. Iain Kelly10:45 am

    Nice twist - does seem like the perfect place for an afterlife!

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    1. Subroto7:08 am

      Thanks Iain. He didn't really want to be there.

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  3. Swallows and Lilies4:28 pm

    Genuinely creepy! I hope someone comes to set them free but somehow I don't think anyone will. Great story.

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    1. Subroto7:10 am

      Thanks Siobhan, I think he is stuck there forever.

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  4. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields5:11 am

    Dear Subroto,

    At least he'll never feel alone. Love the old song.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Subroto4:38 am

      Thanks Rochelle, I am glad you liked it.

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  5. Bill3:23 pm

    Interesting story. Nicely done.

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  6. JadeLi7:50 pm

    Subroto, I was surprised and pleased by the twist of your story. Ghosts are looking for that feeling of home also, which I hadn't considered before reading it.

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    1. Subroto4:35 am

      Thanks Lisa. He wanted a forever home so the house just sucked him.

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  7. draliman11:30 pm

    Eek, a house hungry for living souls to devour... or is it just lonely? :-)

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    1. Subroto4:36 am

      Thanks Ali, it's a bit greedy I think :-)

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  8. Nobbinmaug3:14 pm

    Ahh! The house is trying to make a family. That's sweet.

    "Susurration" Good word.

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    1. Subroto4:36 am

      Thanks nobbin. The house wants to take over the neighbourhood ;-)

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  9. brudberg5:16 am

    The house has quite a big belly... how many dead are there inside?

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    1. Subroto4:37 am

      Too many to count. Thanks for commenting Björn.

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  10. Brenda Cox10:03 am

    Truly chilling!

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