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We meet in the area next to the shops. Not my idea but the counsellor had suggested
a ‘neutral ground’. For my own sanity I’ve
cut off all communications except discussions regarding the children.
It’s the children I’ve come to pickup for the weekend. Seeing her brings emotions flooding back
again. Before the shock discovery I’d
really thought that our life was soaring high.
“You’ve finally lost some weight” she comments.
“It’s the infidelity diet,” I can’t help myself “not really recommended
but it works.”
Her face hardens, “I’ll pick them tomorrow”.
Maybe one day we will make small talk.
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Word Count : 100.
We are hanging around the tower for this week's episode of the Friday Fictioneers.
We are hanging around the tower for this week's episode of the Friday Fictioneers.
I am going for two submissions this week. The first one can be found here -> Maxed Out
I'd love read what you think about this post...
Perhaps she deserved that little dig.
ReplyDeleteMaybe she did but he will have to stop if he wants to co-parent successfully.
DeleteMaybe one day small talk... but not any day soon I'm thinking.
ReplyDeleteNo it is too raw and too soon right now. He needs some time to heal. Thanks for commenting Alistair.
DeleteYou've written an excellent story. The voices are really good; that attempt to remain courteous, but feeling so hurt that you can't resist twisting the knife a little. Kudos!
ReplyDeleteThanks Penny, I am glad you liked it.
Deletesome one didn't tell a lie.....
ReplyDeleteHonesty is a good thing for him right now.
DeleteThanks for your comments Stuart. You are correct, for many this is the sad reality that they face.
ReplyDeleteYou are on a roll, Subroto. This was so well done (Thankfully I know this based on friend's experiences and not mine..)
ReplyDeleteThanks Dale, I'd read about the term "infidelity diet" and decided to use it.
DeleteYou hit the mark with the emotions here. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Jo, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteIt's very difficult to let of hurt and anger. He is justified. However, one day he will let go of all this and accept the truth and move on.
ReplyDeleteHe will move on eventually. Thanks for reading and commenting Anshu.
DeleteDivorce is like a death. It affects you long, long after the papers are signed. This little snippet was an excellent example.
ReplyDeleteDeath of a relationship, but life carries on after that. Thanks for your comments Linda.
DeleteHe's entitled to the occasional dig and this one is so intelligent it must be satisfying to deliver. Well-written post with powerful meaning and a story that is much bigger than its word count. Jilly, Sugar on the Bee.
ReplyDeleteSometimes you do get a chance to deliver a comeback line. Thanks for your lovely comments Jilly.
DeleteSounds like they have a way to go before they can talk nicely to each other again
ReplyDeleteThey probably will once time goes by. Thanks for reading and commenting Michael .
DeleteWell, she deserves it. Doesn't she. But he has to forgive her.. I'm sure one day, he will forgive her.
ReplyDeleteHe might not forget but he has to forgive in order to move on. Thanks for commenting Priya.
DeleteLove the way you crafted the feelings & emotions in this piece.
ReplyDeleteThank you Lisa I am glad you liked it.
DeleteThe infidelity diet works a little too fast. Hopefully they can make their new separation work for the kids' sake.
ReplyDeleteKids should always be the focus when this happens. Thanks for reading and commenting Fatima.
DeleteDear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteSad, but true story in many lives. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle.
DeleteI couldn't help but chuckle at the phrase "infidelity diet", but that's because I'm not the one on it. :) You've managed to capture such deep emotions in this short story.
ReplyDeleteThanks Magarisa I am glad you liked it.
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