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It was the neatness that he had objected to first.
The daily folding of the clothes scattered by him in their bedroom. The picking up of used towels and dirty underwear from the bathroom and it soon escalated to cleanliness in the kitchen.
The immaculate dining table always covered with a tablecloth with the salt and sugar shakers in the same place cutting off the necessity of asking where things were kept.
So when his dirty secret was uncovered it was clear that all the anger against order and neatness was just a reaction from his dirty disorganised private life.
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Written for Friday Fictioneers. Word Count : 100
After writing this I felt that I needed to balance it with a second light hearted story. That can be read here -> Crumbs.
I'd love read what you think about this post...
Dear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteI have to wonder just what was buried under all the disorganization. I want to know his dirty secret. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle, he had a few skeletons in his private life.
DeleteI commented on the other story. This on is my pick for today :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Linda, I am so glad you liked it.
DeleteIt's never about the mess or the cleanliness, is it?
ReplyDeleteNo, it's all about the control, the mess is just an excuse for the violence. Thanks for your comments Dale.
DeleteI actually read your other story first. I loved both of them! :)
ReplyDeleteSusan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
Thanks Susan I am glad you liked them both.
DeleteI just wonder what was hidden beneath it all.
ReplyDeleteLies, deception and violence I'd think. Thank for reading Björn.
DeleteInteresting! I wonder what secret he's keeping. Fun take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteAnne from annehiga.com
It's easier to get upset at outside things than feel the hurt of what is bottled up inside. Better to peel off the layers of that internal onion slowly. At least the person recognizes what's going on, which is half the battle. Good story.
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