She talks of chakras and mandalas
Of invisible wheels of energy flowing
Sacred consciousness
Coursing through the body divine
I stand before her
Silently listening
Washed over by
A torrent of words
Gazing at her doe eyes
As she explains
The seven wheels of energy
That turn in perpetual motion inside
Right from Sahasrara
The thousand-petaled lotus
Radiating pure
awareness
Anahata
The heart chakra
The tiny flame burning within
Unhurt, unstruck, and unbeaten
Ajna
The perceptive third eye
Of intuition and intellect
I steal another look and wonder
If she really knows
That spirituality
Remains a cover
For my desires
The thing about writing poetry is that it is a subjective form of creative expression. It is also the type of writing that I never shared in the past but in the last year or so I find that I am unafraid to share it, so bring on the bouquets or the brickbats :-)
Edit: I added some links to explains some of the Sanskrit words used. At a minimum the word chakra denotes a 'wheel' or a 'circle' and a 'cycle'.
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The seven wheels of energy
That turn in perpetual motion inside
Right from Sahasrara
The thousand-petaled lotus
Radiating pure
awareness
Anahata
The heart chakra
The tiny flame burning within
Unhurt, unstruck, and unbeaten
Ajna
The perceptive third eye
Of intuition and intellect
I steal another look and wonder
If she really knows
That spirituality
Remains a cover
For my desires
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Written for the Friday Fictioneers. Word count:100Edit: I added some links to explains some of the Sanskrit words used. At a minimum the word chakra denotes a 'wheel' or a 'circle' and a 'cycle'.
I'd love to read what you think about this post...
great last line
ReplyDeleteThanks Neil.
DeleteLovely poem! I hope she does feel the same.
ReplyDeleteThanks Alistair. Maybe her third eye has already divined his state of mind ;-)
DeleteWhat a beautiful way to go about describing ones love..
ReplyDeleteThank you Violet, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteI didn't understand all the references, but I certainly understood those final lines. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteSusan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
Thanks Susan. I knew the references wouldn't be obvious so I put hyperlinks on them.
DeleteDear Subroto,
ReplyDeleteI found the links in the midst of the poem somewhat distracting. You beautifully explained the words in the context of the verses. Enjoyable read aside from that. No brickbats her.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle. It's an online medium so added the links in, maybe they were distracting but I thought they might help if anyone wanted an explanation.
DeleteI enjoyed this, Subroto, even if he's really just trying to get closer to her...
ReplyDeleteFake it till you make it ;-) Thanks for your comments Dale, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteYour poetry is lovely. And if she's all that she teaches, then she already knows that he's interested in her personally :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Linda, maybe she does know with her perceptive third eye.
DeleteA unique contribution to the prompt. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sandra.
DeleteA flowing and reflective poem, hope it works out for the two people.
ReplyDeleteThank you Francine.
Deletethis reminds that even the devil will quote the bible if it suits his purposes. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks plaridel, I think you totally got it ;-)
DeleteI echo: this is so unique and lovely. The narrator won't be the first nor the last who tries to get close through sharing an interest - real or fake.
ReplyDeleteSo many romances start that way ;-)
DeleteThanks for your comments Gabi, I am glad you liked it.
Your poem's lovely. I like the 'torrent of words' at the start, showing that he's not really listening to her, but his desire comes through really strongly. Very effective.
ReplyDeleteThank you Margaret, I am glad you picked up on that, it was exactly my intent.
DeleteSpirituality is a great pick-up thing
ReplyDeleteThanks Björn, there are always benefits in being spiritual :-)
DeleteGgrrr .... my comment was erased. OK - I ll start again. : )
ReplyDeleteLovely poem with with the warmth of a wanted love. I didn't find the words distracting as I know about charkras. I thought your interpretation of the prompt was unique. Well done ...
Isadora
Thank you for taking the time to start again :-) Thanks for commenting Isadora, I am glad you liked it.
DeleteNicely done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Lisa.
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